全国高考已经结束，高考作文随即火爆全网，从“红楼梦”到“双奥之城”大家对高考作文题目各抒己见。然而，追着高考作文热点的准留学党们，别管别人的作文如何了，你的文书PS写好了吗？

 

文书写作是需要反复打磨的，唯有一遍遍的修改，才能在最后呈现出最佳的作品。担很多同学在文书写作时，总避免不了这些问题：

 

过分堆砌无用经历

这是很多同学们在初稿时最容易出现的问题。很多同学在文书开头甚至还会出现My/I开头的句式，然后下文直接介绍自己的本科背景、专业课程。逻辑上没什么问题，但是整体句式和语法就显得没有任何吸引力，很容易影响招生官对学生的印象分。

举例：

My name is XX. I will graduate from xx in the June of xx, and I am applying for your xx program. In university, I have taken classes like Advanced Mathematics, Basics of Computers, Mechanics, Mechanical Drawing and CAD, Basics of Mechanical Design, Measurement Technology, and Electrical Control, etc. Besides the courses, I have also independently designed and carried out many experiments.

 

这种句式，乍一看来好像也没什么问题，但是就如同上面说的，没有吸引力，非常平铺直叙，怎么修改呢？可以尝试提出自身亮点，再辅以其他材料的描述，可以改为：

Majoring in XX, I am applying for your prestigious xx program. Over the past four years, I have obtained abundant experience in xx and xx.

 

无法提炼具体经历亮点

大多数人在写文书时，总是泛泛而谈，没有将自己的经历落到某一个实处，这样就让招生官阅读起来时无法很好的代入进去，无法形成情感上的共鸣，导致对学生的情况印象不深。

 

文书充满了不切要求的面面俱到

有些学生在写文书时，并不会结合学校的要求，而是一味的想突出自己的亮点，把自己的课程、实习、科研、课外活动等一起糅杂成文。但是，同学们要知道，文书的作用，是阐述自己选择学校的理由，并给出学校选择自己的理由。我们的文书如何能做到在招生官看到文书材料时能直接选择你？这就需要我们按照学校要求（如果有），结合自身经历，写被大众认可的可圈可点的经历，不要一味的写自己认可的经历。

 

叙事平淡，语言拖沓

这几乎是所有文书都具有、且最难改善的问题，也是文书需要持续打磨的原因。很多同学觉得自己的文书没有特色，就是没有经过更深层的加工。造成这个问题的原因一方面在于英语写作功力不足，同时对于文章的结构、表述方式缺乏设计，另一方面在于在中文环境中培养英语逻辑，就容易导致语言不够简洁。写作能力的提升是一个非常持久且需要个人下苦功的过程，需要大家不断的积累、接受外界输入。

举例：

When I was in my childhood, I realized the computer is very magical and full of interesting secrets after my parents bought the first computer. Via computer, I was able to access the most amazing games, newly published music, and watch images of cities I had never seen. Under this influence, I got exposed to computers and information when I was just a few years old, from simple operations to tool usage and online information search. After that, I was aware that computer and information technology must change human’s future one day. The magical thing can connect every corner in the world and supply so vast information and data.

 

修改后：

Accompanying our first household computer bought by my parents was supervised access to the most intriguing and exquisite games, newly-released music, and images of places I had never visited. Therefore, since a very young age, I have witnessed the sweeping power of computers and wondered about principles beyond them. From simple operations, through tool usage and online information searches, I came to the revelation that computer and information technology would change human’s future by magically connecting every corner in the world and supplying vast information and data.

 

了解了上述文书写作的问题点，大家在后续的文书写作中应该能避免很多问题了，如果在写作中能有清晰的逻辑梳理，对结构也有自己的把握，相信你能写出优质文书！